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Nowadays many people choose to be self- employed rather than to work for a company or organization. Why it might be the case? What could be the disadvantages if being self-employed?

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It has become common these days for
people
 to opt to be
self employed
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 than to
work
 for others.
This
 essay will look at some reasons why
this
 happens and a few disadvantages that
comes
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 with
self
-employment.
To begin
 with, there
a
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number of reasons why some
people
 choose to do their own
work
.
Firstly
, they desire to be managers from the onset. It is common to start off low in companies as before one joins, there already will be existing employees. So it will not be surprising for a person to
work
 as a junior from the onset.
This
 means taking instructions from seniors and
also
 obliging with company rules. Meanwhile,
people
 who desire to be managers will like to
take
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 decisions and run things by themselves and in their own comfortable time without being subjected to some laid down rules and regulations of a firm. The plausible way to achieve
this
, is
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people
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running
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 their own businesses so
the
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they
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 can do as they please. Some of the drawbacks that
comes
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 with working for
self
 are mainly low capital and . Most private businesses commonly do not have the means to involve experts in their establishments. They try to do all the thinking and
manuveuring
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manoeuvring
 by themselves or even hire cheap labour for the job. By so doing they may not earn much in their endeavours to talk of making profits. Unfortunately, businesses are competitive and consumers appreciate quality.
Hence
, customers will channel their monies to ones offering excellent services and these are mostly the public firms. To add to
this
, most employees
at
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private
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sectors
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 hop from one job to the next because they are not well paid.
This
 is because owners of private institutions are very
self centered
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 and keep huge portions of profits made to themselves whilst giving very little to their workers as salaries. These workers do a lot of
work
 and get very little. Over a period they come to the realization that they are not satisfied with their earnings and leave.
To sum up
,
self employment
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 has become common nowadays but it comes with some disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • autonomy
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • entrepreneurial spirit
  • financial instability
  • self-motivation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • healthcare
  • retirement plans
  • administrative tasks
  • compliance
  • isolation
  • camaraderie
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