The chart below show the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

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The diagram demonstrates the expenses on consumer goods by two different nations in the year 2010. It is immediately apparent that the United

Kingdom

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spent extra money on more items than

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did. Cars were by far the commodity that both countries spent much on. Whilst the United

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spent 450,000 pounds Sterling on cars,

France

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paid 50,000 less of the amount used by the United

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at 400,000 pounds sterling.

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, books and cameras were purchased in the United

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France

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. Whilst a little over 350,000 was used for cameras in the United

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, a little less than half of

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amount was spent on cameras in

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, computers and perfumes were patronised more in

France

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than in the United

Kingdom

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at 380,000 and 200,000 pounds Sterling respectively. Meanwhile, 350,000 and 140, 000 were used on computers and perfumes in the United

Kingdom

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The chart below show the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

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