The chart below show the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
The diagram demonstrates the expenses on consumer goods by two different nations in the year 2010.
It is immediately apparent that the United
Kingdom
spent extra money on more items than France
did.
Cars were by far the commodity that both countries spent much on. Whilst the United Kingdom
spent 450,000 pounds Sterling on cars, France
paid 50,000 less of the amount used by the United Kingdom
at 400,000 pounds sterling. Similarly
, books and cameras were purchased in the United Kingdom
than
in Rephrase
rather than
France
. Whilst a little over 350,000 was used for cameras in the United Kingdom
, a little less than half of this
amount was spent on cameras in France
.
However
, computers and perfumes were patronised more in France
than in the United Kingdom
at 380,000 and 200,000 pounds Sterling respectively. Meanwhile, 350,000 and 140, 000 were used on computers and perfumes in the United Kingdom
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