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The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The given line graphs
illustrates
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power
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the power
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in
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of
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Australian
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the Australian
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 Dollar
of
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in
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 Australian commerce from 2004 to 2009 within China,
Japan
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 and
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USA
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the USA
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 Generally, Australia’s trade with China has significantly increased their
imports
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while
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Japan
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 and
USA
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 maintain a similar level from 2004 to 2009.
However
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,
exports
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 in
Japan
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has
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apply
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increased in the first year
while
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USA
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the USA
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continues
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continued
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 their range until 2006.
Imports
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 and
exports
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 in
Japan
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has
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 been started
by
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at
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 A$20 billion and
exports
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has
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apply
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achive
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achieve
achieved
 their maximum level of A$45 billion and
then
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has
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apply
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started to
decrese
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decrease
,
while
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it’s
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its
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imports
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maintain
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maintained
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a the
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the
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 same level of A$20 billion until 2008 and
then
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 it has been started to decrease slightly within 2008 and 2009.
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Finally
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 there is no significant increment or decrement
of
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in
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imports
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 and
exports
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 in the
USA
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, usa, imports, exports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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