The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
bar chart presents the rate of
home
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homes
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owned and rented for living in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
Hene
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, we can see that the
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always fluctuating. Once, rented housing was popular but It had lost appeal and personally owned houses took It's place. In 1918, the sum of owned living
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was nearly 25% and the
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started increasing in the following years.
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, It stood with the percentage of rented
accomodation
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accommodation
50
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at 50
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%
respectively
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in 1971.
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, the number started climbing and became nearly 70% in 2001. Afterward, In 2011 It faced a decline and showed a rate of 65%.
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the
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contrast, The highest
statistics
we can see for the rented living system was 78% in 1918.
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, It witnessed a decrease in the following years. It never rose as high as 1918. In 1939
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1953 the rate was
same
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the same
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. It fell about 10% in 1961 and faced equality with
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private accommodation in 1971.
In Addition
, It showed a gradual fall since 2001 and little rise in 2011 but the sum was slightly up to 50% of the other
statistics
.
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