Some oeple think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult ought to be optional instead of compulsary. To what extend to you agree?

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obvious

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that nowadays

children

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have a lot of stress on

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. Some people believe some

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as mathematics and philosophy have to include their syllabus mandatory

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others think it is not mandatory. Personally, I agree

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those

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should not be mandatory in their syllabus. I will discuss

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everyone has

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to select what they should learn in

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future, it is common for

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as well. My personal idea is as a parent we want to give them support only, we should give them a chance to select which path they like to

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in their future. Because some kids have talents

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as art, drama and music. If we force them to choose something they do not like it will harm their future.

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will badly

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them, so we want to be more careful

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while

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selecting

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subjects

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for them. As parents and

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we want to understand

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have various abilities and we

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give them

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support to go

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own path which will

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their careers.

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children

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should learn analytical ability from their childhood, which is compulsory.

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their

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young age teachers and parents have to teach them how to solve problems analytically and wisely. For

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, they can add mathematics and philosophy

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their curriculum as a foundation of their education. Which will help them to have a strong analysis thinking pattern from their childhood. In conclusion, we want to have different skilled people in the world to make it a

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place.

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, we need different skilled characters, not only scientists. My opinion is mathematics and philosophy would be optional

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when they

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secondary

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school

but in their primary education we want to give them basic knowledge of those

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Some oeple think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult ought to be optional instead of compulsary. To what extend to you agree?

Fully explain your ideas

Differences between countries are becoming less evident. Nowadays people are watching the same films, fashion, brands, advertisements and TV channels. To what extend do the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?

Some people believe that car-free days are effective ways to reduce air pollustion. However, others argue that there are other ways that are more effective. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that it should be compulsory for people to retake their driving test every 5 what are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this?

as well as making money, businesses also have responsibilites. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?