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Some oeple think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult ought to be optional instead of compulsary. To what extend to you agree?

#oeple #children #subjects #mathematics #philosophy #compulsary
It is
obviuose
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obvious
obviously
 that nowadays
children
 have a lot of stress on
studies
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their studies
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. Some people believe some
subjects
such
 as mathematics and philosophy have to include their syllabus mandatory
while
 others think it is not mandatory. Personally, I agree
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 those
subjects
 should not be mandatory in their syllabus. I will discuss
this
 in
further
 paragraphs.
First,
everyone has
right
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the right
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 to select what they should learn in
their
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 future, it is common for
children
 as well. My personal idea is as a parent we want to give them support only, we should give them a chance to select which path they like to
go
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 in their future. Because some kids have talents
such
 as art, drama and music. If we force them to choose something they do not like it will harm their future.
This
 will badly
effect
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affect
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on
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apply
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them, so we want to be more careful
while
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when
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 we
selecting
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select
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subjects
 for them. As parents and
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guardians
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guardian
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 we want to understand
children
 have various abilities and we
want
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towant
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 give them
for
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support to go
their
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on their
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 own path which will
bright
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brighten
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 their careers.
However
,
children
 should learn analytical ability from their childhood, which is compulsory.
In
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their
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a
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 young age teachers and parents have to teach them how to solve problems analytically and wisely. For
this
, they can add mathematics and philosophy
subjects
for
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to
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 their curriculum as a foundation of their education. Which will help them to have a strong analysis thinking pattern from their childhood. In conclusion, we want to have different skilled people in the world to make it a
success
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 place.
Therefore
, we need different skilled characters, not only scientists. My opinion is mathematics and philosophy would be optional
subjects
 when they
in
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are in
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 secondary
shcool
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school
 but in their primary education we want to give them basic knowledge of those
subjects
.
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