You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The line chart illustrates the monthly change in temperatures in
Paris
,
Dubai
and Sydney. From an
overall
perspective, it is evident that
Paris
has the lowest average
temperature
,
while
the climate in
Dubai
is mostly hot over the months. In January,
Paris
is reported to have the lowest
temperature
at 5
Celcius
,
while
Dubai
is warmer at 18
Celcius
. Sydney has the warmest January at 24
Celcius
. The climate in
Paris
is favourable since continually increases to July and reaches a peak at 20 degrees in August. In fall and winter, the Parisians suffer from cold weather, significantly at 5 degrees in December. The
temperature
in
Dubai
is mostly warm over the year and reaches its hottest month in August at 35
Celcius
before dropping to 23 degrees in December.
Lastly
, people living in Sydney have a cool summer with the lowest
temperature
at 13 in July and slightly warmer to the end of the year at 24
Celcius
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words paris, dubai, temperature, celcius with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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