The graph below gives information abouth the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information abouth the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The line chart below compares the portion of people that live in urban areas between 1970 and 2020 in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
,
Thailand
and Indonesia, all
four
being east
asian
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Asian
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countries
.
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it estimates these figures until 2040. We can see that
Malaysia
had achieved the highest
figure
among these
countries
while
Thailand
's
population
prefers to live outside of
cities
the most.
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, we witness the same increasing trend in all
four
countries
in the future. Looking at the graph,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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and
Malaysia
had almost 30
per-cent
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per cent
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of their
population
living in
cities
back in 1970, with
Pilippines
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Philippines
having a slightly more
figure
. They changed place twice until 1990, when
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the Philippines
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Philippines
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Philippine's
Philippines'
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population
in
cities
began to decline. Not long after that,
Malaysia
achieved the
highes
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highest
figure
among these
four
countries
. The decline in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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continued until 2010 when they again, started to move back to
cities
and
this
trend has continued ever since. It can
also
be seen that
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Thailand
and Indonesia had close 20
per-cent
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per cent
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and 15
per-cent
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per cent
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of their
population
living in
cities
in 1970. They both attracted more citizens to live in towns until 1990 when
Thailand
's
figure
almost stopped
changint
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changing
until 2020.
Whereas
Indonesia rocketed and rose to
the
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second place between these
four
countries
in 2010.
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