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Digital communication technology, such as email, instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connection between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answers and include examples from your own knowledge or experience.

With the enhancement of technology, the entire world
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 touched and connected than past era. I completely agree with the given statement as we are experiencing the benefits now, and through
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In today
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,
whole
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the whole
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 world
connected
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 to each other easily by using social media applications. Even
there
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 are more facilities WhatsApp, email, messenger, Twitter and Telegram are the most common among them. Actually, as a witness and as a person who
getting
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 the benefits of them it's easy to point out some reasons to get them more popular. If someone has a suitable device and internet access, he or she can easily get in touch
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 a single button press and no need to have
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extraordinary knowledge regarding technology.
User
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 interface is very
attrctive
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attractive
 and simple ,
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 anyone can use them without
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guidance. Modified user interfaces
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 address
to
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differently able people are
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avaiable
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available
 and there are features to customise options
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 their
need
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. As an example, for the blind community they can reset the applications with sounds and notifications
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played
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 as a recording.
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 they can use social
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media
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 to connect with others independently.
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, those appliances provide
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an opportunity
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 to connect with others even though they live thousands of miles
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away from loved ones. There are more smart options
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of sharing
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 not only texts
,
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 but
also
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 images, documentaries, videos
and
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recordings etc.
This
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society. Nowadays, humans tend to migrate and settle down in developed countries and even it is they can lively connect with family members daily.
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, one of my friends who
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 in Australia for more than five years, is getting connected with family via WhatsApp video calls daily. My husband is working for a New
Zelend
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Zealand
 company and even
he
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 lives in Sri Lanka he
able
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 to join
with
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in
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 meetings and discussions via
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the Teams
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 app. It means those social applications are a
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 for the people.
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, as new technological attachments are highly available and popular, they are preparing the background to connect
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 other easily.
Therefore
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 I strongly agree
on
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 that statement.

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