The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given chart illustrates how
Anthropology
graduates'
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graduates
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students from
single
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university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course,
while
the table provides the salaries of the anthropologists
in
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work
after five years.
Overtime
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, a general trend half of
anthropology
graduates
went
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for
a full-time
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full-time work
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work
,
although
government sector employment is the highest salaries
anthropology
graduates
average after 5 years of working. As can be seen, graduate students' destination from one university 52% went for full-time.
work
,
while
part time
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job it's 15%.
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,
unfortunately
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12% and 8%
students
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of students
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are unemployed
also
not know.
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know
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working during studies could be difficult, so the rates of full-time postgrad study and
part time
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part-time
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postgrad study
wasn't
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that high enough.
Secondly
, the amount salaries of
anthropology
graduates
after 5 years'
work
there are three types of employment; government sector 50% achieve 100,000$+.
Furthermore
,
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of freelance
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freelance
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consultants 40% are taking 100,000$+.
Finally
, private companies are the lowest only 30% achieve 100,000$+.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words anthropology, graduates, work with synonyms.
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