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The proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets

The pie charts compare the percentage of carbohydrates, proteins and fats in three various
diets
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 ( average
diet
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, healthy
diet
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 and healthy
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 for sport).
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,
it is clear that
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 carbohydrates have the highest amount in all three types of
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while
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 the lowest percentage in these three kinds of
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(average
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, others and so on ). belongs to fats. As can be seen, carbohydrates make up 60% of the healthy
diet
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 for sports compared to 50% and 40% for healthy
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 and average
diet
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 respectively. The largest proportion of protein is available in the average
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 in comparison with only 25% in a healthy
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 for sport.
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, less than a third have been eaten in a healthy
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. It is noticeable that average and healthy
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 have the same amount of fat which is about a fifth
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 the figure for a healthy sports
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 drops to only 15%.

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