The graph below gives information abouth the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

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Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia from 1970 to 2020,

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predictions for 2030 and 2040. In

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very fast around 50, and by 2040 it was the highest with 55. In Malaysia, in 1970, it was 30,

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it kept on increasing till 2040 with more than 80. In Thailand, in 1970, it was around 20, in 1980, it was 25, in 2030 it was nearly 40 and in 2040 it

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45. In Indonesia, in 1970 it was between 10 to 20, and in 2040 it was 55.

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predictions and population in four countries living in cities.

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The graph below gives information abouth the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. Identify the possible causes of this trend, and propose some solutions you think would be effective.

Young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to work or study in cities. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the drawbacks?

Some teachers think that changing subjects with every lesson will help their students focus more. However, other teachers think that offering their students several lessons on the same subject in a row will help them focus more. Which opinion do you think is better?

In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.