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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wasles between 1918 and 2011

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wasles between 1918 and 2011
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illustrates
 the volume of households, which were bought by
the
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clients or
rental
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 by people in
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England and Wales from the
year
 1918 to 2011.
Overall
,
houses
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the houses
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 owned by
oweners
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owners
 ratio's trend was upward.
Whereas
,
rental
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the rental
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 client's position was
downturn
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. In a nutshell, from the
year
 1918 to the
year
 1961 trend was downward for the landlords. The ratio was 40%
in
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highest
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. After that, in the age of 1971, it created a balanced position with rental
owener
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owner
owners
. Both reached at the same point, which was 50%.
In contrast
, households in rented
accomodation
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accommodation
 began with
highest
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 rate (77%).
However
, it steep drop down to
to
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its lowest point, which was 50%, like proprietors. Followed by
next
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 four decades it gradually increased, and in the
year
2011
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,2011
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 it earned almost 63% rental
oweners
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owners
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratios" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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