The diagram below shows the production of olive oil

The diagram below shows the production of olive oil
The diagram illustrates how olive oil is produced.
Overall
, the process consists of 7 steps, beginning with harvesting
of
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the
olives
from the olive trees and ending up with the packing and sale of prepared
product
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. First of all, mature
olives
are collected by farmers from trees and
then
taken to a rinsing machine for washing with cold water.
After
this
process, clean
olives
are transferred to another machine, which is used for smashing, to clean fruit from unnecessary stones. In
this
process, the olive stones are removed.
Then
paste
olives
are put into
bag
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with holes before another step which is pressing. After that, bags were put through a pressing machine and followed by another step where extra water
is
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separated from the oil. After 7 stages, the olive oil, which is prepared, is packaged for stores and
finally
, delivered to shops where it can be sold to customers.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words olives with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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