The diagram below shows the production of olive oil

The diagram below shows the production of olive oil
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The diagram illustrates how olive oil is produced.
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, the process consists of 7 steps, beginning with harvesting
of
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the
olives
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from the olive trees and ending up with the packing and sale of prepared
product
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. First of all, mature
olives
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are collected by farmers from trees and
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taken to a rinsing machine for washing with cold water.
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this
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process, clean
olives
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are transferred to another machine, which is used for smashing, to clean fruit from unnecessary stones. In
this
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process, the olive stones are removed.
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paste
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are put into
bag
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with holes before another step which is pressing. After that, bags were put through a pressing machine and followed by another step where extra water
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separated from the oil. After 7 stages, the olive oil, which is prepared, is packaged for stores and
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, delivered to shops where it can be sold to customers.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words olives with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Harvesting
  • Ripe
  • Sorting
  • Crushing
  • Paste
  • Grinding stones
  • Steel blades
  • Pressing
  • Extraction
  • Liquids
  • Centrifuged
  • Settle
  • Purified
  • Distribution
  • Olive trees
  • Labels
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