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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. »

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. »
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The bar chart compares the spending of 4 different countries on 6 various products.
Overall
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, Britain is the largest consumer market in each category
while
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 Germany is the collectively smallest one.
Moreover
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, photographic film is the most popular goods altogether.
To begin
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 with, British citizens spend about £170
thousand
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 on graphic movies, about 5.000 more than the French, the second major buyer of
this
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 item. Customers in Britain
also
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 allocate a large amount from their budget for toys about £
165.000
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165,000
while
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 those in France and Italy each spend almost £160
thousand
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. The sales of CD and perfumes in Britain is
also
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 high, at 162 and 160.000 pounds respectively.
Although
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 less than £160.000 from
this
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 country goes to the remaining, it is still the number one consumer of them.
By contrast
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, Germany is the country with the least expenditure of all on the above-mentioned stuff. The Germans spend no more than £150
thousand
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 on each kind of goods.
Besides
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, France’s spending is higher than Italy’s on CDs and photographic film, but the opposite is true for tennis racquets, perfumes and personal stereos, for which Italy overtakes France as the second largest market. In fact, the payments by the French on those things are the lowest, with around £145, 146 and 147
thousand
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 respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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