It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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Some might argue that manners and morality should necessarily be taught at

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, their minds are still fresh and pure, so it is the best time to fill their mind with kindness and pure intentions.

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, they will eventually start picking up thoughts here and there and it is best if we get to their minds before evil can; which is in their adolescence.

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, teenagers might watch a variety of clips on the internet which are definitely a mix of good and wrong things and

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, we want them to be prepared to differ rights from wrongs.

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, if we miss the chance

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a positive effect on them as their parents or teachers, we might not get the chance as we will barely see our kids when they grow up.

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to always pick the suitable punishment for our children. We should never let them forget that we have their back and

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, we are there to help them.

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, physical punishments or calling our kids names

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will only hurt their body, soul and eventually, their trust in us as their supporters.

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, it is crucial that they have a meaningful and

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they are paying for their wrong actions. One instance of

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punishments could be taking away their right to play with toys until they haven't returned their sister's toy which they took by force and indeed, they haven't apologized.

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, I strongly agree with teaching our kids about morality at an early age

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
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Finally
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

Include an introduction and conclusion

While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree? You should write **at least 250 words.**

Now many big cities in the world are increasing in size. What are the problems associated with it? What are the solutions to these problems?

These days, in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this? How could more people be encouraged to come into the teaching profession?

As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.