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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society?

#countries #students #study #science #university #effects #society
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Nowadays, the number of students
are
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choosing to
study
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science
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 at university is not enough.
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 essay will discuss the main reasons
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this
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 causes and
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 describe the possible
effect
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effects
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 on society. The main reasons that students not choosing to
study
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science
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 are a higher tuition fee and correlated with
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 competitive in
term
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 of enrollment as a prospective
student
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.
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, the amount in each
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more
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to
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 several practical experimental
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study
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,
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 as a medical
student
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need
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a lots
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 of medicine or health equipment, buying a cadaver, and booking a laboratory.
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,
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at
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the
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apply
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science
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 well known as
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prestigeous
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prestigious
 title. Regarding
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that cause make a high demand
thus
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 accepted rote in
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 year. There are not a few
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pupils
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 themselves to
study
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 hard to achieve
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grade
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 in requirements. The possible effect of
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problem
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 the country is invariably negative, Particularly
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with
while
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sciences
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scientific
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 cognitive and expertise availability.
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American
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the American
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 Association
in
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science studies
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Science Studies
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, in a whole year, 17.000 final year
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student
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students
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 at secondary school decide to choose
other
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another
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 subject (social or business school).
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, the competitiveness during selection process
sometimes
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 restricted, bordered, and denied other dream applicants to
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achieve
 their
goal
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. In conclusion, the
expensive
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of
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fees
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 the
more
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tight
acceplance
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acceptance
 rate are the main reasons why almost of
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pupil
 not enough interesting to choose
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study
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science
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 at university. The countries
leave
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 behind struggle to find skilled or
competence
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Scientist
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 and to create a better education with stand for inclusivity.
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  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reluctance
  • perceived difficulty
  • rigorous assessment
  • real-world application
  • job prospects
  • shortage
  • scientific research
  • technological advancements
  • economic growth
  • innovation
  • workforce imbalance
  • environmental challenges
  • public health crises
  • infrastructure development
  • scholarships
  • grants
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