The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas.
The bar chart depicts the increase in the
population
in some of the world's biggest cities as well as
the population
distribution in urban and rural areas.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the population
in Tokyo was the highest in 2010, while
population
of
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the population
Jakarta
lowest in 1970. Change noun form
Jakarta's
Furthermore
, there was a significant increase in Tokyo, Shanghai, Bombay,
Jakarta, whereas
New York maintained the same level throughout the period.
To begin
with, Tokyo accounted for over 15 in 1970 which was increased to 27 roughly in 2010 and had the largest population
in the final years. The figure for Bombay, it had namely 5 , therefore
it
rose to 12 before going up to over 25 in 2010. In terms of New York and Shanghai, they Correct pronoun usage
apply
shared
similar
numbers , namely under 15 and over 15 before Shanghai rose gradually to over 20 in 2010.
With regards to Jakarta, it obtained approximately 3 which increased to under 10 in 1990 before rising to under 20 in 2010.Wrong verb form
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