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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
A growing
number
 of individuals today demand convenience for their life,
due to
 the rapidly growing of countries in the world.
However
, more than a million tons of
wastes
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waste
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 have been thrown out every day.
Although
,
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 plenty of garbage
have
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 been
being
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recycled
from
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at
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 home,
populace
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the populace
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 can not recycle it all
as a result
 of there
were
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being
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 too much of it. So
that
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, I think
governments
 should have a principle to increase
recycling
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 of rubbish. On that issue, it is necessary to say that
to
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states should take action. I have a few ideas about waste processing.
For example
, everybody should not use a nylon bag,
instead
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 we can use a bag made from fabric
into
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 each family. In
the
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light of that can be used
abundance
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times
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of times
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also
its
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make
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 us feel extremely beautiful. Another example, every individual can collect a
number
 of wastes, including
the
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copper, rubber, paper,
box
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,… from everywhere,
also
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 can use that to recycle or sell to
governments
. In my
countries
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country
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, they often organize activities in connection with
garbage
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the garbage
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 disposal, and they
were having
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 a
number
 of persons who
have participated
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 in that activity.
Beside
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, my government has encouraged people to recycle waste by advertising on television. You can see that, on the one
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 it is necessary to decrease
amount
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 of refuses,
on the other
hand
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this
 principle puts some people at a disadvantage. Perhaps they are up to their eyes in work,
also
 the elderly can not ability to do that. In conclusion, I only agree
that
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with 80%. The world will be great if
governments
 make a
number
 of
principle
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principles
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 about wasteful taxation as
populace
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the populace
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 must follow that rule. From my perspective,
governments
 ought to provide input to the Ministry of Education on guidance on how to recycle rubbish
as
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to overcome the causes that make litters more and more.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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