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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#aim #science #people #lives
I strongly, agree with the statement that the most important aim of
science
 should be to improve
people
's
lives
.
Science
have
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 made
people
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people's
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life
 easy.
Firstly
,
Science
 plays
an
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a
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 great role in our
day to
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day-to-day
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day
life
.
Due to
science
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,
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a community can work
easy
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easily
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 and fast. Society is so
much
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depended
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 on
the
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science
 and technology.
For example
, in
old
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 time the
nation
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a
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public
use
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 to have problems
in
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 health but nowadays the age of
a
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the
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 public have
increase
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 a lot
compare
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 to
olden
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the olden
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 days.
Science
have
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improve
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improved
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life
 in many ways like in health, education
as well as
transportions
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transportation
transportations
.
However
, a community are working hard but
also
 smart to develop new technology .
Science
invention
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 should be
in
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done in
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such
 ways that
it
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they
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 help
people
in improving
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improve
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there
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their
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life
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lives
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 because
people
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people's
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lives
 are more
importance
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important
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compare to other things.
Secondly
,
According to
me
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,me
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science
 should work more on improving
a
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apply
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people's
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people
lives
.
Public
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The public
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 should support
science
improve
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improvement
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. As
science
play
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plays
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an
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a
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 great role in improving
people
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people's
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lives
 the government should support the system.
Thirdly
,
Hence
,
science
have
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 made things easy and fast which
indirecty
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indirectly
 help groups.
Thus
, the main aim of
science
 should be
improve
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to improve
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people
's
lives
.
For example
, in
olden
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the olden
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 days the facilities of medicien
was
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were
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 not
avaible
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available
 but nowadays it
aviable
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available
 so
ages
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the ages
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 of
a groups
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a group
groups
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is
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are
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increase
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increasing
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day
 by
day
.
To conclude
, the above information describes the importance of
science
 in our
day to
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day-to-day
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day
life
.
Hence
, I strongly agree
to
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 the statement that
science
 should have
main
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the main
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 aim
in improve
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of improving
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people
's
lives
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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