Some people think that subjects like arts, music, drama and creative writing contribute more towards a child's overall development. The school curriculum should provide more time for these subjects to be taught if the school wants the all-round development of children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is a very debatable topic

now-a-days

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whether more

time

should be provided to

children

for

extra curricular

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extracurricular

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activies

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activities

or not. A part of society is in

favor

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of providing more

time

while

other

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are against

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this

subject. Prior to furnishing any opinion, I shall be expatiating both

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points of

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in the upcoming paragraphs. The ones who are in

favor

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that schools should spare more

time

for additional activities like arts, music, drama, etcetera have their own views.

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Firstly

, these

activites

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activities

should provide a break

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the students from their

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academic

academics

study

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.

This

helps to increase their output, as they feel more relaxed and refreshed if they have 2-3 lectures for these activities during the day.

Moreover

, by giving exposure to young ones they will get a chance to choose their career as per their interest.

For example

, many students in the school are choosing arts as their main area of career and following their passion.

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, the people who are against

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view point

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have their own reasons. The main reason is that pupils make an excuse to run from

studies

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their studies

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. If

children

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more involved in

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co-curricular activities they will try to avoid

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acedemic

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academic

studies

and by giving reason

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drama practice class, they will enjoy their period as free. Another reason is that, at a young age mentees are not in a position to

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their decisions well and may waste their

time

by neither doing

studies

nor being aware

about

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their

actually

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interest

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interests

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.

Due to

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they will feel depressed and

embarresed

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embarrassed

in future when

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of their friends

acheived

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achieved

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something in life and they have not done anything.

To conclude

, though people have many reasons to support both the

view points

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,

but

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I am of the opinion that schools should provide

time

for extra-curricular

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activities

but not in excess.

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involvement in these gives

children

a way to run from

studies

and

children

will

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might

take

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make

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inappropriate decisions related to their careers.