Some people think that subjects like arts, music, drama and creative writing contribute more towards a child's overall development. The school curriculum should provide more time for these subjects to be taught if the school wants the all-round development of children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is a very debatable topic
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that
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whether more
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should be provided to
children
for
extra curricular
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activies
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activities
or not. A part of society is in
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of providing more
time
while
other
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others
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are against
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this
subject. Prior to furnishing any opinion, I shall be expatiating both
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points of
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in the upcoming paragraphs. The ones who are in
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that schools should spare more
time
for additional activities like arts, music, drama, etcetera have their own views.
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Firstly
, these
activites
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activities
should provide a break
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the students from their
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academic
academics
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studies
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.
This
helps to increase their output, as they feel more relaxed and refreshed if they have 2-3 lectures for these activities during the day.
Moreover
, by giving exposure to young ones they will get a chance to choose their career as per their interest.
For example
, many students in the school are choosing arts as their main area of career and following their passion.
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, the people who are against
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have their own reasons. The main reason is that pupils make an excuse to run from
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their studies
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. If
children
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more involved in
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co-curricular activities they will try to avoid
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academic
studies
and by giving reason
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drama practice class, they will enjoy their period as free. Another reason is that, at a young age mentees are not in a position to
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their decisions well and may waste their
time
by neither doing
studies
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their
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interest
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interests
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.
Due to
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they will feel depressed and
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embarrassed
in future when
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of their friends
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something in life and they have not done anything.
To conclude
, though people have many reasons to support both the
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,
but
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I am of the opinion that schools should provide
time
for extra-curricular
activites
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activities
but not in excess.
Because more
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involvement in these gives
children
a way to run from
studies
and
children
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might
take
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inappropriate decisions related to their careers.
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