Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace. Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages.

It is undeniable that internet technology has
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great benefits to
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distance working.
Although
it has huge benefits, I think, it
also
has some drawbacks in terms of the quality and how they maintain their relationship among the employees. One of the biggest benefits
working
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remotely is
in
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time management. Mostly, people choose working from home because it
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them to tackle several jobs in a day
while
keeping their eyes on the main one.
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this
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women have a tendency to do
house work
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such
as cooking, laundry or playing with their kids if the task is just to report or attend online meetings.
This
is why people like to work from home because they still have more spare time to do other regular jobs. Despite these advantages, it is believed that there might be some detrimental effects
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doing
this
kind of job.
Firstly
, there will be a lack of ability in their working qualities which is they will put less effort
such
as needing long hours to finish their job even the simple one.
Secondly
, they do not have real communication with their colleagues and it will decrease their relationship bonding. Obviously, working out of the regular place has other negative aspects,
thus
it is better to keep the regular working environment alive as usual.
To conclude
, working outside of the office allows people to manage their time
according to
their own schedule.
However
, it probably lowers their quality because they work
while
doing other things and
could not
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focus on their task.
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