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Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully, whereas others think that it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is said that certain individuals like planning their free
time
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 activities carefully,
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 others believe in wasting their
time
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.
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 doing what we want in our free
time
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 without planning can be fun at times, I believe that careful planning helps
people
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 have a worry-free experience when
traveling
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 to a new place. First of all,
people
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 like to adventure their lifestyles nowadays. In developing countries, free
time
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 is rare and
people
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 tend to do whatever they want to enjoy themselves. Take
traveling
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 as an example; if
people
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 visit places without planning, I believe that there would be so much fun because we don’t know what kinds of activities are there at our destinations.
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,
people
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 will have excitement as they don’t know what they are going to encounter.
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,
people
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 need to make a careful
plan
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 when they want to travel to dangerous places.
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,
people
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 should carefully
plan
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 before
traveling
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 to Myanmar as
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 country is under a cruel military coup. They should know the do’s and don’ts and prepare an escape
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 if they were in the middle of armed conflicts. Without a proper
plan
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, it will endanger their lives.
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, careful planning is needed when
traveling
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travelling
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 to problematic places.
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, despite having excitement without a
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 when
traveling
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, careful planning is
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 a safe way.
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, I agree we should
plan
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 it
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 the situation
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