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Writing task 1 The charts give information about the diet and general health of two groups of students. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Writing task 1 The charts give information about the diet and general health of two groups of students. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart displays information about the common diet of two groups of
students
 consisting of five criteria of
food
 and the table shows the percentage of illness in the past year, overweight and attendance at classes in
group
 A and
group
B
.
Overall
,
food
 with high-fat content and cereals were the most popular pieces of
food
 in the
students
' diets.
Additionally
, most of the
students
 attended their classes and a small
group
 of them experienced illness in the past. Half of the diet of
group
B
students
 consisted of
food
 with high-fat content,
while
this
 percentage was 35 for
group
 A. The consumption of cereals was similar in both groups, at 35%. 22% of
group
 A
students
 consumed vegetables, which
this
 percentage was almost one-fourth for the second
group
.
Additionally
, only 8% of the first
group
 and only 5% of the second
group
 put fruit in their diet. The consumption of fish had the lowest proportion in both groups, similar to fruit and vegetables in
group
B
, with 5%. In the case of general health, 90% and 75% of
group
 A and
group
B
students
 were involved, respectively. 20% of
group
B
students
 suffered from being overweight, which in
group
 A was half of
this
 number, with 10%.
Similarly
, the proportion of illness in the past year was almost doubled in
group
B
, in comparison with
group
 A.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, food, group, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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