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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meats in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meats in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates people who are eating non-veg food like fish, chicken, beef and lamb in
the
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Europ
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Europe
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at
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from
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 the
year
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 1997 to 2004.
Overall
, the chart clearly shows that people mostly eat non- veg and the highest intake was 250
grams
 per week.
Also
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 the least consumption per week is not under 20
grams
. In the beginning,
amoung
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among
 all the non-vegetarian food, fish
is
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 the least consumed food
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in
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between 50
grams
throught
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through
throughout
 the 19th to early 20th century.
Amoung
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Among
 the four types,
the
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beef was
intaken
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 more but it slightly reduced in
between
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the next 2 years. Again it increased near 250
grams
.
additionlly
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additionally
 it has a slight up and downs in 1989to 2004.
In addition
, at the initial time both the lamb and chicken
was
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 consumed 150
grams
 per week. Later
on
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 the chicken took a drastic increase over
all
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the
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 year to 150
grams
, but the lamp consumption was reduced to 50
grams
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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