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In most successful organizations, some people believe that communication between managers and workers are the most important factor, other people say that other factors are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 some people believe that communication between managers and
workers
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 is crucial for company
success
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, others say that
also
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 different
factors
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 are important.
This
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 essay will discuss both sides of the argument and give my opinion; on why different
factors
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such
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 as wages important for running a successful business. On the one hand, communication skills between the
management
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 team and
workers
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 are important for running complex
projects
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 from a task achievement and time
management
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 perspective. Big
companies
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 run different complex
projects
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 at the same time and
workers
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 have to manage different tasks from different
projects
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 in their daily work life. If they can't manage task achievement on current project deadlines, they will fail. If they communicate effectively with their manager weekly basis, managers can easily see bottlenecks and manage them in the right direction. From another point,
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 superior feedback mechanism helps their time
management
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 which is one of the most critical aspects of project
management
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 and finishing
projects
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 with
success
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result
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 in company
success
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.
On the other hand
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, wages and being respectful of different colours and cultures
some
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are some
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 of the most important
factors
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 for running a long-term successful business and I totally agree with that view. If
companies
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 want to push boundaries for
workers
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 they have to give high salaries and create well environment after work.
Workers
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 shouldn't think about what they eat outside or how they will pay their bills. They should focus on the work.
Also
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 when we look at the most successful
companies
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 in the
last
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 decade, we see that they are multicultural
companies
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 and collect intelligent people from all around the world.
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, they show respect for all cultures and languages.
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, they make culture days on a weekly basis which consist of different organizations like cultural food or music days. These organizations make
workers
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 like in their homes and build comfort zones in their workplace. In conclusion, some people think that the main reasons for sustaining a successful company rely on communication skills between
workers
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 and managers. Others thought that different
factors
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 were crucial as well. In my opinion, salaries and creating a respectful environment for different backgrounds of
workers
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 will bring
success
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.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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