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Writing Samples
Band 6

You have rented an apartment recently, but you are facing some problems. Write a letter to the landlord: •Describe the details of the problems •How are these affecting your family •Ask for possible solutions

Dear Mr. Sanders, I'm writing in regard to the inconvenience I have in apartment 10, on the 5th floor. The issue is that the water cooler produces noise caused by the vibration of some parts that are connected to a water hose.
As a result
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, we had a sleepless night
due to
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 the constant buzz and knocks coming from the storage room.
Luckily
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 it was Saturday night and I
have
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 not left for work
,
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however
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, it is necessary to fix the problem until the upcoming Monday. I kindly ask you to take any measures as soon as possible. One way to tackle the issue is to invite a service person or, in case of a high price, replace the spare part yourself. As I'm going to be at my place all day
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 I will be available to assist if my help is required. Looking forward to your quick response, Faithfully Yours, Bibib

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grammar
Make lines clearer. For example, say 'Please fix this by Monday' and 'I can help if you need me'.
structure
Put one idea in each part. Start with the problem, then how it hits your home, then what you ask.
format
Use a proper closing like 'Yours faithfully,' and sign your name.
task response
The letter shows the problem and asks for action.
coherence
It tells how the noise affects your family.
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