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some people think that govements should spend money for faster public transportation , others think that there are other important piorities . Dicuss both views and give your opinion

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A group of people think governments should allocate money
on
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to
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 faster means of transportation,
whereas
 some argue with the former statement. Detailed discussion and
opinion
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opinions
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 about the topic are given below. First of all , the Economy of a country mostly depends on its
transport
system
. Many countries in the world step ahead
by
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with
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 their modern
transport
system
 than others. Quicker transportation not only saves time but
also
reduce
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reduces
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 the damage
of
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to
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 products.
For example
 in our country
due to
 lack of appropriate updated
transport
 systems goods get damaged which in
turns
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responsible
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is responsible
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 for the fall of
economy
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the economy
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 of a country.
Secondly
, a faster
transport
system
also
 saves time.
on the other hand
, Authorities
also
 focus on some other issues
such
 as
environment
, cost and so on.
Environment
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 pollution is one of the burning issues nowadays. If pollution
going on
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continues
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, in
near
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the near
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 future it will be impossible for
our
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the
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 next generation to lead a healthy life. Many health-related problems
such
 as depression,respiratory infection,
skin
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and skin
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 disease will occur. In my point of view, Governments should emphasise both faster means of public
transport
 and other fields like the
environment
.
Although
 the need for a faster
transport
system
 is necessary, the necessity of a safe
environment
 is
also
 undeniable.
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