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Some people says we should plant trees on free space jn city and town while some says that we should do construction. Do you agree or disagree?

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People
 have differing opinions on whether tree planting should be encouraged in our society at the expense of
construction
. I agree with the fact that planting
trees
 and putting up infrastructure
is
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 equally important and should
both
 be encouraged. On the one hand, a balanced ecosystem is necessary for the survival of multiple species.
Trees
 are indispensable living creatures of the environment with numerous benefits like shelter, food and absorption of atmospheric carbon dioxide to reduce the problem of global warming. Felling of
trees
 is done to acquire wood to manufacture papers, furniture and cooking materials. Despite
this
, replanting
trees
 is
also
 necessary to replace the lost ones. Their existence makes the ecosystem balanced.
Therefore
, it is logical
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group
opine
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 on tree planting in cities and towns. I agree with
this
.
On the other hand
, the human population has increased and so has
streetism
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streets
street
. Not all parents are able to cater properly for their wards and the result of
this
 is
people
 hawking on the streets. Studies have shown that most crimes are carried out by
people
 who live on the streets. It is brilliant for the government to put up structures that will serve as homes for
such
people
.
Also
, putting up buildings that can serve as places for employment will in the broader sense reduce poverty in society and
consequently
 reduce the number of
people
 who live on the streets thereby making
such
 societies relatively safe for
people
 to live in. It is quite evident and I side with the fact that
construction
 is beneficial to a nation.
Nonetheless
,
aforestation
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 and
construction
both
 serve to create jobs for the
people
 involved in the act. It is undoubted that
both
 are necessary In conclusion,
construction
 and
aforestation
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deforestation
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 each have their unique benefits which cannot be replaced by the other.
Hence
, I agree that
both
 aforementioned projects should be carried out in our countries.
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