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Some people says we should plant trees on free space jn city and town while some says that we should do construction. Do you agree or disagree?

People
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 have differing opinions on whether tree planting should be encouraged in our society at the expense of
construction
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. I agree with the fact that planting
trees
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 and putting up infrastructure
is
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 equally important and should
both
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 be encouraged. On the one hand, a balanced ecosystem is necessary for the survival of multiple species.
Trees
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 are indispensable living creatures of the environment with numerous benefits like shelter, food and absorption of atmospheric carbon dioxide to reduce the problem of global warming. Felling of
trees
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 is done to acquire wood to manufacture
papers
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, furniture and cooking materials. Despite
this
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, replanting
trees
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 is
also
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 necessary to replace the lost ones. Their existence makes the ecosystem balanced.
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, it is logical
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group
opine
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 on tree planting in cities and towns. I agree with
this
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.
On the other hand
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, the human population has increased
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 so has streetism. Not all parents are able to cater properly for their wards
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 the result of
this
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 is
people
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 hawking on the streets. Studies have shown that most crimes are carried out by
people
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 who live on the streets. It is brilliant for the government to put up structures that will serve as homes for
such
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people
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.
Also
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, putting up buildings that can serve as places for employment will
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 the broader
sense
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sense,
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 reduce poverty in society and
consequently
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 reduce the number of
people
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 who live on the
streets
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streets,
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 thereby making
such
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 societies relatively safe for
people
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 to live in. It is quite evident
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 I side with the fact that
construction
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 is beneficial to a nation.
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, aforestation and
construction
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both
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 serve to create jobs for the
people
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 involved in the act. It is
undoubted
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 that
both
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 are necessary In conclusion,
construction
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 and aforestation each have their unique benefits which cannot be replaced by the other.
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, I agree that
both
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 aforementioned projects should be carried out in our countries.

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structure
Put your view in a clear line at the start. Stick to one main idea in each paragraph.
coherence
Use easy links like and, but, also, because to show how ideas fit together.
language
Keep to short, plain sentences. Check any hard word or misspelling.
content
Give strong, real examples that fit the task and back up your claim.
task response
You discuss both sides and finish with a clear view.
coherence
You use ideas about air and jobs to support points.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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