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Today many buildings such as offices and schools have an open-plan design (no walls between areas for different activities) instead of separate rooms. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays it is common to see school buildings and offices with no separating
walls
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 but rather rooms.
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 essay will look at some reasons for
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 and the advantages it comes with.
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 with, putting up structures is costly these days. The price of cement and
lands
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 are pricey. Primarily, one of the main
reason
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reasons
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 for not putting up
walls
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 as a means of demarcation is to conserve space.
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 is because
walls
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 consume some land,
meanwhile
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such
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 spaces could be utilized for other purposes of construction rather than building
walls
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. Another factor is saving
money
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. Putting up a wall requires concrete. In Ghana
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for
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 example, the price of cement is a fortune. So authorities
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 rather save that
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 for another project than
to
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just construct a separating wall. As already highlighted, there are some benefits to
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. These are preserving lands and judicious spending. The lands that
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otherwise
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 have been used to build
walls
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 can serve as a source of
garden
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the garden
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.
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 will create job opportunities for people who will tend
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such
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 gardens.
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, judicious
money
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 spending stems from not investing in cement to put up
walls
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 which wouldn't make much of a difference in the function of the structure as curtains can equally do these demarcations. The
money
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 saved can be used in the health sector and subsidize tuition fees for education.
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, the common practice of not putting up separating
walls
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 in buildings
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 as schools and offices is a means of saving space and cost.
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