Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Doe this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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the china
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china
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traffic system.
China
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traffic system is very
mordern
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modern
, fast and
convinient
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convenient
. You can see high-speeded
train
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trains
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and
subway
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subways
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everywhere in
china
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China
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. It is unblievable that it just takes 5 hours to go from
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to
beijing
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Beijing
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. The
high-speeded
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high-speed
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train can reach
to
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370km in
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hour. The second
things
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make
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me suprise is the payment method.
Chiniese
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Chinese
people
seemly do
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not
use
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cash anymore. They use
wechat
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WeChat
, and other apps for all their payment activities just by
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click on their phones. You will not
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be worry
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about taking too much money
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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