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The picture below shows how tomato ketchup is made

#picture #tomato #ketchup
The process diagram illustrates how tomato ketchup is produced.
Overall
, it could be seen that the whole manufacturing undergoes 15
several
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stages before getting to the final consumer from the harvesting of the tomatoes till
it
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they
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gets
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get
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 to shelves for sale.
At
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 the beginning, the farmers harvest the matured tomatoes which
is
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are
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 the main raw ingredient into baskets after that,
there
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is sorting done to separate the good from the bad ones before sending them to the factory through a van. Moving on, at the factory the stalk, seeds and skin of the tomatoes are removed and put in a container which is covered for crushing and
then
 added to it is sugar, vinegar and salt
there after
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 brought to a boil.
Furthermore
, the mixture after boiling is left to cool for two hours and poured into bottles for labelling which is the eleventh stage.
Also
, the products are sent for quality control inspection
then
further
 packed into boxes or cartoons and sent to the sales points
such
 as the supermarkets by a distribution vehicle for consumers to buy to be served with meals
such
 as hamburgers and fries.
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