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The following diagram shows the process of cloning a sheep. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following diagram shows the process of cloning a sheep. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 diagram illustrates a procedure in which we can clone a
sheep
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 from the DNA taken out of
it's
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cell
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.
Overall
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,
this
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 process starts with two
sheep
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,
one
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 is the target for our cloning and the other is just a female
sheep
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. Two stages of work need to be done separately on each
one
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 of the
sheep
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 and there are exactly three stages after that. Looking at the diagram, we can see that there are two
sheep
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 in the beginning,
sheep
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 A and
sheep
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 B, which are both female.
One
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cell
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 is extracted from each
one
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 of these
sheep
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,
one
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 body
cell
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 from
sheep
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 A and
one
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 egg
cell
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 from the other. In the next stage, the DNA of
sheep
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 A is taken out of the extracted
sheep
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 A
cell
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while
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 in the same stage,
nucleus
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the nucleus
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 of the egg
cell
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 is
also
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 removed. The DNA is
then
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 put into the empty egg
cell
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 with a method called fusion. Having our fused
cell
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 ready, it is
then
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 taken care of until it is turned into a
sheep
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 embryo. In the next stage, the developed embryo is put inside a third female
sheep
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's uterus, which is
also
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 called the foster mother.
Finally
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, the embryo grows up in the
sheep
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's womb and becomes a little lamb who is a clone of
sheep
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 A.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sheep, cell, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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