You need to borrow some money to pay for something you need for your work or studies. Write a letter to your bank to ask for a loan. In your letter introduce yourself and ask for a loan say why you need the money explain how you plan to pay the money back

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

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letter in regard to the

study

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loan that your bank provides to students who want to

study

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abroad. My name is Manpreet Kaur

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I recently completed my

Bachelor

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Bachelor's

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in Commerce from Delhi University with flying colours. Basically, I reside in Hoshiarpur,

It's

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a District of Panjab

and

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, and

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now I want to go abroad for my

further

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studies. In fact, I am thinking of enrolling in a Post-Graduate course in Business Management.

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the main reason to get a loan for studying in a foreign land. As my father is a farmer and my mother is a housewife, they are unable to arrange the funds for it.

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, I believe in myself that as soon as my course is completed, I will land a good salaried job in Canada because there are a plethora of opportunities after Business

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study

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studies

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Also

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, I have earned some certificates

such

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as Project Management and Leadership from Google programs, which will surely help me in getting work in future. I hope you

would

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understand my situation and approve the

Study

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loan for Canada. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours

Faithfully

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, Manpreet Kaur

manubadial

Sep 25, 2023

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content

Add a clear plan to pay back the loan with a date or amount each month.

structure

Put each idea in its own paragraph: intro, need, plan to pay, closing.

language

Check small grammar and keep the simple words: use its, not it's, and simple links.

tone

The tone is formal and polite.

content

The need for the loan and the plan to study abroad are clear.

structure

Opening and closing lines fit a bank letter.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

196 words

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