: You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another company Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - Explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months - Say how your work could be done while you are away - Ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear Mr. Smith,

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Islam

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Mohamed, and I hope my letter finds you great. I am writing

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letter to ask for your

hepl

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help

as I want to move to the

head

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office

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in Canada for six months.

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with, I would like to work at our

head

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office

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for six months because I have to complete my

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at Ontario

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this

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master will help me develop my career path

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and will give me the chance to be promoted in the long run.

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, if I could work for the

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, I would take care of my current responsibilities, and I

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be communicating with my current

collegs

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on a regular basis to finish all my tasks smoothly.

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, I would be grateful if you could assist me with

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issue. As you are one of our company's

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, I hope to have your

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permission

to work for the

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for six months. I

lookforward

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look forward

to hearing from you, and your response in

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matter is greatly appreciated. Faithfully yours, Islam Mohamed

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

178 words

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