You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter •correct the information in the article •explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information •suggest what the magazine should do about this situation Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
letter to you to mention that there are a couple of incorrections in your latest article that I read yesterday. The summary was about Brampton town, which is my hometown. The purpose of
letter is only to aware you of things that you already wrote down in the article. There is no doubt more than 50 % of the population living in Brampton is from India and travels quite frequently. But all do not belong to Punjab. There are more than 10 Communities that are basically from India but living in Brampton.
is crucial to publish correct data.
will encourage every region to know, where their community is settling down.
help the new generation to explore more things in a developed country like Canada. You could republish the same article in the upcoming week so that the information regarding the regions settling down in other countries would be correct. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Harpreet Kaur.
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Task Response
Please ensure that the information provided is accurate and relevant to the given topic. Focus on correcting the inaccuracies in the article with clear and specific details.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing could be more formal. Consider using 'Dear Editor' to address the recipient. Ensure that the closing is courteous and professional.

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