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The map shows the public library 20 years ago and now. Compare and summarise the information in about 150 words.

The map shows the public library 20 years ago and now. Compare and summarise the information in about 150 words.
The given map represents information about public
library
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libraries
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 in 2003 and two decades later.
Overall
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, there are a lot of huge changes in all sides of the map,
moreover
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,
central
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the central
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 library
became
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has been
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 modified.
In addition
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, some rooms increased in
sizes
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size
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, and
something
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some
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are
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were
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 removed. It can be clearly seen that
left
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the left
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 upper and right bottom
corner
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corners
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 changed fully.
For instance
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, computer games,videos and so on changed for storytelling events and children’s fiction
books
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,
moreover
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, there
added
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were
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 two sofas for more
comfortable
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comfort
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.
Furthermore
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,
enquiry
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the enquiry
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 desk was changed to
cafe
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the cafe
a cafe
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,
also
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 both places changed their forms, and
square
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the square
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 metres increased,
besides
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, tables and chairs
removed
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were removed
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 from the centre. It is obvious that places
such
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 as
lecture
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the lecture
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 room and computer room changed insides,
however
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,
outside
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the outside
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 almost did not change. Only
door
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the door
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 was changed
in
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to
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 the
left’s
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lefts
left
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 of
entrance
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the entrance
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. It is interesting to note that in the past
right
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the right
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 and left side of the centre
used
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were used
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 for adult fiction
books
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 and non-fiction
books
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, but nowadays time has changed and
in
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on
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 the
left
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,left
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 there are all
reference
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the reference
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books
Use synonyms
, and
in
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on
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 the
right
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,right
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 there are technologies
such
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 as information desk, self-service machines and so on.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolve
  • renovation
  • infrastructure
  • amenities
  • state-of-the-art
  • landscape
  • pedestrian
  • augment
  • spatial
  • demolish
  • construct
  • accessibility
  • innovations
  • extensions
  • facade
  • environmental-friendly
  • urban development
  • public facility
  • modernize
  • technology integration
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