The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and

locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The
pie
charts provide information
what
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about what
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makes
people
most happy
in
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at
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20 and 50
years
of
age
Overall
, it can be seen that
people
under 30
years
of
age
and over 30
years
of
age
both
ages
people
are most happy
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with achievement
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achievement
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achievements
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at
work
to
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at
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31% and 32%. And least happy
both
age
groups other factors which
is
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are
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14% and 10% Looking at the first
pie
chart
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apply
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that
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apply
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people
under 30 ages are
most happy
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the happiest
show examples
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with achievement
show examples
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with achievement
show examples
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achievements
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achievement
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achievements
show examples
at
work
31% and doing other habits is less happy than
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achievements
show examples
achievement
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achievements
show examples
at
work
,which is 22%.
Then
, having a good appearance has decreased 4% as compared
doing
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to doing
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hobbies, which is 18%,respectively. Travelling and other factors are
also
reduced
both
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in both
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activities
approximately
equal
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apply
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15% and 14%
that
Correct determiner usage
a
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difference
1
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of 1
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% as compared
both
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to both
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activities
. Turning to the second
pie
chart
that
infrom
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apply
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about over 40
years
age
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old
show examples
people
make
Verb problem
are
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least happy
other
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in other
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activities
and most happy
achievement
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achievements
show examples
at
work
,which is 32%.
Therefore
, doing hobbies
people
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to people
show examples
make happy
that
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apply
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decreased
8
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by 8
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%
than
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apply
show examples
achievements at
work
that is
24%.
Financiall
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Financial
security and being with family
both
are newly added ,which has
nkt
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not
the first
pie
chart
.
Correct article usage
Both
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The
Correct article usage
Both
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both
activities
Correct subject-verb agreement
make
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makes
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make
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people
happy
20%and
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20% and
14% ,which is more than the first
chart
.
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