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Overpopulation is the world’s most serious environmental problem. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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With the development of society, the
population
 of the
world
 is increasing. Nowadays, an issue that has fuelled a heated debate is whether
overpopulation
 is the
world
’s most serious environmental problem or not. I strongly agree with the above-mentioned statement. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the impact of
overpopulation
 on resource consumption and air pollution.
Firstly
,
overpopulation
 can lead to over-exploitation of resources，
this
 is because the more
population
, the more resources need to be consumed.
For instance
,
according to
 Chinese government research, many areas in northern China have become deserts
due to
 excessive deforestation, resulting in environmental pollution.
Moreover
, many medicinal materials will vanish from the
world
.
Hence
, over-exploitation of resources
due to
population
 will affect the
world
 environment.
Secondly
，Carbon dioxide
also
 affects the air.
For example
，
according to
 Harvard University research, excessive emissions of carbon dioxide will damage the atmosphere and lead to global warming.
Moreover
, global warming will cause the sea level to rise and many small islands will be submerged by the sea.
Thus
,
overpopulation
 will lead to environmental problems.  In conclusion, whether
overpopulation
 is the main cause of the destruction of the earth's environment still needs to be studied. I strongly agree that is the main cause. With the development of society, the
population
 of the
world
 will be increasing in the future.
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