Overpopulation is the world’s most serious environmental problem. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

With the development of society, the
population
of the
world
is increasing. Nowadays, an issue that has fuelled a heated debate is whether
overpopulation
is the
world
’s most serious environmental problem or not. I strongly agree with the above-mentioned statement. In
this
essay, I will discuss the impact of
overpopulation
on resource consumption and air pollution.
Firstly
,
overpopulation
can lead to over-exploitation of resources,
this
is because the more
population
, the more resources need to be consumed.
For instance
,
according to
Chinese government research, many areas in northern China have become deserts
due to
excessive deforestation, resulting in environmental pollution.
Moreover
, many medicinal materials will vanish from the
world
.
Hence
, over-exploitation of resources
due to
population
will affect the
world
environment.
Secondly
,Carbon dioxide
also
affects the air.
For example
according to
Harvard University research, excessive emissions of carbon dioxide will damage the atmosphere and lead to global warming.
Moreover
, global warming will cause the sea level to rise and many small islands will be submerged by the sea.
Thus
,
overpopulation
will lead to environmental problems.  In conclusion, whether
overpopulation
is the main cause of the destruction of the earth's environment still needs to be studied. I strongly agree that is the main cause. With the development of society, the
population
of the
world
will be increasing in the future.
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