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Some people believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue,but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Presently,
culture
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 is the most important feature of a
country
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 and
this
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 feature will have a big impact on employment.
Tourism
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 is one of the features
to develop
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 the
country
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.
This
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 essay will disagree that
culture
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 will be destroyed by
tourism
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 revenue.
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,it is vital to understand that
tourism
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 has a lot of advantages to develop the
culture
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 of the
country
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.
This
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 is because,
tourism
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 has some features
such
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 as tourist attractions,and advertising to other countries with
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pride.
Besides
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 that
tourism
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also
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 protects
culture
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 from negative external influences and improves the
development
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 of
culture
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.Tourists are the main reason for contributing to
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tourism
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 and serial
that is
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 the
development
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 of
culture
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.
On the other hand
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,others argue that
culture
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 will be ruined if it is used to earn
tourism
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 revenue.In my opinion,I totally disagree with
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 statement because tourists
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can spend money to visit other countries and
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 it will lead to the
development
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 of countries'
tourism
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.The turnover of traders will be very low because they have to pay taxes for the places they sell so people can't believe that
culture
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 will be destroyed by
tourism
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.
For
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 my perspective,my opinion is extremely right and
culture
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 will be served by
tourism
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.All of the features of
tourism
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 can provide for the
culture
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 of the
country
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. Taking everything into account,
tourism
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 is the only career of protecting
tourism
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 and
this
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 is
also
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 the best way to the
development
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 of
culture
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.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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