The increasing availability of low-cosy airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Nowadays whole the world is converted into a village
due to
airlines
activity. Many companies are reducing Change the noun form
airline
prices
of Correct article usage
the prices
ticket
so that Fix the agreement mistake
tickets
people
easily travel around the world. This
is one of highly
controversial Correct article usage
the highly
issue
some Fix the agreement mistake
issues
people
are
feel Unnecessary verb
apply
this
is positive
development and others Add an article
a positive
are felt
negative. In Wrong verb form
feel
this
essay, I am going to examine this
question from both points of views
and Fix the agreement mistake
view
then
give my opinion on this
matter.
To begin
with, they are more beneficially
for Change the word
beneficial
general
public to buy a ticket Add an article
the general
Change preposition
at in
in
affordable price and save Correct your spelling
an
the
Correct article usage
apply
traveling
time. Change the spelling
travelling
Moreover
, As per survey
Add an article
the survey
a survey
of
BBC Change preposition
by
news
, in the Capitalize word
News
last
two years tourism
Correct article usage
the tourism
industries
business is going to boomChange noun form
industry's
up
. Change preposition
apply
For example
, If you are planning to travel 2000 Km, then
by road or train minimum 24
hours is required for travelling, but with Change preposition
of 24
Correct article usage
a plane
plane
Add a comma
plane,
this
distance is covered in only 2 to 3 hours. People
takes
so Change the verb form
take
much
benefits and Change the quantifier
many
visited
Wrong verb form
visit
at
new locations and reach there early and easily.
Change preposition
apply
Secondly
, If they have lots of benefits but some drawback
is here. If the price is reduced Fix the agreement mistake
drawbacks
then
all the people
are going on
Change preposition
to
airport
Correct article usage
the airport
and
Correct word choice
apply
increase
the crowd and needs some additional manpower are security. Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
Secondly
Add a comma
Secondly,
people
are not using the other transport like as bus or train then
lots of loss to
in Change preposition
apply
this
sector. In Instance
, Correct your spelling
For instance
according to
report
Add an article
a report
the report
of
Change preposition
in
Times
of India, 30 percent Correct article usage
the Times
Change preposition
of business
business
are closed Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
due to
this
, people
are mostly prefer
Change the verb form
mostly prefer
to
airlines.
In conclusion , after analyzing both sides of Change preposition
apply
argument
. I think that both of these views have merits.
Add an article
the argument
an argument
Low cost
price is Add a hyphen
Low-cost
great
idea from airlines is favourable for Add an article
a great
people
but it is effects
on other transports. Correct your spelling
affects
Airport
is Add an article
The airport
high
initial area of all the countries they have their own protocols.Add an article
the high
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