The increasing availability of low-cosy airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Nowadays whole the world is converted into a village
due to
airlines
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activity. Many companies are reducing
prices
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the prices
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of
ticket
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so that
people
easily travel around the world.
This
is one of
highly
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the highly
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controversial
issue
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some
people
are
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feel
this
is
positive
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a positive
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development and others
are felt
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feel
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negative. In
this
essay, I am going to examine
this
question from both points of
views
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view
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and
then
give my opinion on
this
matter.
To begin
with, they are more
beneficially
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for
general
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the general
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public to buy a ticket
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at in
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in
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an
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affordable price and save
the
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apply
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traveling
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travelling
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time.
Moreover
, As per
survey
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the survey
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of
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BBC
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, in the
last
two years
tourism
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the tourism
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industries
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industry's
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business is going to boom
up
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apply
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.
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, If you are planning to travel 2000 Km,
then
by road or train minimum
24
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of 24
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hours is required for travelling, but with
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a plane
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plane
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plane,
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this
distance is covered in only 2 to 3 hours.
People
takes
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so
much
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benefits and
visited
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visit
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at
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new locations and reach there early and easily.
Secondly
, If they have lots of benefits but some
drawback
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drawbacks
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is here. If the price is reduced
then
all the
people
are going
on
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to
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airport
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the airport
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and
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increase
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the crowd and needs some additional manpower are security.
Secondly
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people
are not using the other transport like as bus or train
then
lots of loss
to
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in
this
sector.
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,
according to
report
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a report
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of
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in
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of India, 30 percent
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of business
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business
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businesses
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are closed
due to
this
,
people
are mostly prefer
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to
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airlines. In conclusion , after analyzing both sides of
argument
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the argument
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. I think that both of these views have merits.
Low cost
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price is
great
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a great
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idea from airlines is favourable for
people
but it is
effects
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affects
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on other transports.
Airport
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The airport
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is
high
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the high
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initial area of all the countries they have their own protocols.
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