The increasing availability of low-cosy airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays whole the world is converted into a village

due to

airlines

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activity. Many companies are reducing

prices

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ticket

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so that

people

easily travel around the world.

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is one of

highly

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controversial

issue

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some

people

are

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feel

this

positive

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development and others

are felt

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negative. In

this

essay, I am going to examine

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question from both points of

views

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and

then

give my opinion on

this

matter.

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general

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public to buy a ticket

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affordable price and save

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traveling

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time.

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, in the

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industries

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business is going to boom

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apply

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, If you are planning to travel 2000 Km,

then

by road or train minimum

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hours is required for travelling, but with

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plane

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this

distance is covered in only 2 to 3 hours.

People

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much

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benefits and

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new locations and reach there early and easily.

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drawback

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is here. If the price is reduced

then

all the

people

are going

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airport

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and

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increase

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the crowd and needs some additional manpower are security.

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people

are not using the other transport like as bus or train

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lots of loss

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this

sector.

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according to

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of India, 30 percent

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business

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are closed

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people

are mostly prefer

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airlines. In conclusion , after analyzing both sides of

argument

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the argument

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. I think that both of these views have merits.

Low cost

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price is

great

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idea from airlines is favourable for

people

but it is

effects

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on other transports.

Airport

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initial area of all the countries they have their own protocols.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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The increasing availability of low-cosy airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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More and more business meetings are taking place online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

Some people think that there will be decrease in international travel in future. Do you think the less ammount of international travel is a positive or negative or a negative development?