The increasing availability of low-cosy airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays whole the world is converted into a village

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activity. Many companies are reducing

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so that

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easily travel around the world.

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controversial

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development and others

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negative. In

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matter.

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business is going to boom

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distance is covered in only 2 to 3 hours.

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benefits and

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new locations and reach there early and easily.

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is here. If the price is reduced

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the crowd and needs some additional manpower are security.

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people

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are not using the other transport like as bus or train

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lots of loss

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sector.

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of India, 30 percent

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are closed

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airlines. In conclusion , after analyzing both sides of

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. I think that both of these views have merits.

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idea from airlines is favourable for

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but it is

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on other transports.

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initial area of all the countries they have their own protocols.

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