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The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These pie charts depict a survey of visitors about the most positives and negatives of
Bowen
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Island
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. It is clear from the graph that, one of the biggest issues for the visitors was the high cost of living.
According to
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 what is shown, the most negative of
Bowen
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Island
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 is the cost of living which represents half
while
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 entertainment accounts for the quarter
while
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 15% of the people have seen the weather as a negative and the lowest category is food quality 10%. In terms of the most advantages of
Bowen
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Island
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, the people came with the highest positive by 42 per cent, and the second class is the scenery at 35 per cent,
however
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, the accommodation is higher than the culture by one per cent.
To sum up
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, we could say that
while
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 the half of people argue that living in
Bowen
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Island
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 is costly, the accommodation is quite good,
also
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 they have different views of the advantages.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bowen, island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • According to the survey
  • Visitors reported
  • The pie charts show
  • The most common advantages/disadvantages
  • A significant proportion
  • A small percentage
  • In contrast
  • Notably
  • The largest segment
  • Similarly
  • On the other hand
  • A major advantage/disadvantage
  • To highlight
  • Overall effect
  • Impact the experience
  • In summary
  • Illustrates
  • Reflects
  • Highlights
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