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The three charts illustrate proportion of granted degrees at the National University in 1990 and 2000 years compared to 2010.

The three charts illustrate proportion of granted degrees at the National University in 1990 and 2000 years compared to 2010.
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The three charts illustrate
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the proportion
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 of granted degrees at the National University in 1990 and 2000 years compared to 2010. It can be clearly seen that degrees granted in
Computer
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scince
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science
 at National University rose gradually every 10 years,
whereas
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 in other fields we can see slight fluctuations during the period.
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 in 1990 for
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Scince
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science
 and Business fields
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 granted
equal
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 30 per cent, and the figures for Medicine and Law were 25 % and fifteen per cent respectively. In 2000
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 of degrees that
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 granted for
Computer
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Scince
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science
 and Medicine rose slightly to 40% and 30%.
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, there was a decrease in the Law and Business fields, which is a mere 10 per cent and only 20 %. Meanwhile, in 2010 the pattern appeared to be slightly different. The number of grants for
Computer
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Scince
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science
 increased gradually to 45 %,
whereas
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percentage
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the percentage
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of
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 Medicine and Business decreased
for
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 5% for both.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, scince with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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