In most countries, young people form a large proportion of those who are unemployed. Why this is the case, and what can be done to solve the problem?

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It is true that nowadays there are a lot of problems with unemployment.
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, I would say that there might be some problems
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solutions. It is considered that one of the main reasons is choosing
wrong
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job.
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words
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ended
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profession
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in
university
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or college might not
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in
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city or sometimes in
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.
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, in Kazakhstan just over 40 per cent
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of humans
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can not find their jobs,
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, 30 per cent of
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are young students who just
ended
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university
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.
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, they begin to be poor and lose their gold time
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of
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problem.
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for
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this
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problem should find
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university
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a university
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,
they
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should employ young humans for minimum
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years.
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, in my
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this
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problem is possible to solve
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because nowadays a lot of universities
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with huge companies. It is assumed that
second
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the second
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trouble
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problem
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is not
enough
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having enough
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education for work.
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means that young human beings found their jobs, but they were kicked
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the
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jobs.
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, in
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last
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apply
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2022 year
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university
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of Nazarbayev found for their students good job, but
cause
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of not enough education they became free from the companies.
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, it shows that in some universities they do not teach rightly.
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, there are a lot of
unemployment
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people. The best solution for
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is
study
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hard in universities, and
do
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not skip the practice lessons.
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, in my opinion
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is less possible to solve, because, nowadays humans becoming more and more lazy. In conclusion, there were two main problems of unemployment.
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in my
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only one can be solved.
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