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The picture below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 word

The picture below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 word
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he provided
picture
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a picture
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demonstrates
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demonstrating
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 the idea of a
museum
 in 1998 and after changes had been made in 2008.
Overall
, the
museum
had
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has
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 been getting more extra services
as well as
 reducing the space of
permanent
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the permanent
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 exhibition room. In 1998, the permanent exhibition room was fairly distributed
by
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on
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 two sides with a garden in the
center
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centre
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.
While in
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In
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 2008, it was relocated directly to the East of the
museum
as well
as
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and
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 the garden
had been
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apply
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added some features
such
 as a place to drink coffee and some fountains.
the Cafe
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The cafe
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 remained the same in the North of the garden as well
for
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as
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 the Entrance of the
museum
, which is South
from
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of
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 the center. At
first,
it was planned that all extra services
will
Wrong verb form
would
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 be placed in front of the
musuem
Correct your spelling
museum
 with a temporary exhibition room to the left corner and stores at the right with a restroom in 1998. After 10 years, extra services were mainly stayed to the West of the
museum
 with a restaurant
was
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added in the North West corner and the toilet was put next to the cafe in 2008.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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