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Today's society provides people with various ways to lose weight, such as special diets or exercise regimes. Many people believe though that poor food and today's lifestyle should be addressed first. What is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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The two maps compare an Industrial area in the present with the proposed improvement in the future in Norbiton.
Overall
, the industrial area witnessed considerable changes to its road layout and entertainment facilities. These included the appearance of a roundabout, school, playground, medical
center
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, shops, and housing,
whereas
 several features,
such
 as factories, were demolished. The major alteration will be to the transportation system. Nowadays, there is only one roundabout. In the future, the second roundabout will be constructed, and it will link the housing to the school. A
further
 notable change is that the road will divide a river with a bridge. Another significant alteration will be
extension
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 of city facilities. To the east of the first roundabout, it will be the school, the playground and the medical
center
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 and to the
western
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 of the first roundabout shops will be built.
Moreover
, factories will be repurposed into the housing.
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