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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this

#year #school #university
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There are two different types of
students
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 nowadays in schools and colleges. The first ones are those
students
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, who are hardworking, punctual, and inquisitive from the start of their education. They always excel in their academic exams and
studies
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.
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, the second type of
students
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 are the ones who don't pay attention to their
studies
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. They always find a way to neglect their study by being absent frequently in
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school and being reluctant.
Eventually
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 those
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 fail to get good grades, fail to perform in their study period and suffer. The first type of
students
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 have a determined attitude towards facing the hurdles in their
studies
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. They overcome the hurdles and get used to achieving success.
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, they become good academically.
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, these
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students do
 not” get a year off after completing school. They proceed to the
university
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admission
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 process keeping in mind the best universities available. Resulting in a timely completed degree.
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hand
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 the
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 who are less strong academically, tend to get
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in
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university
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 a year or two later compared to the intelligent
students
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. The main reason behind
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 gap of
studies
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 is that they prepare for the exams in which they performed terribly or not
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.
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, they reattempt the exams in order to
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 eligible
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 the requirements of the
university
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 for
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. In conclusion, my opinion is that every student should perform competently in
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studies
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 and “not” get a year off after school. The preparation to get good grades should be executed from day one.
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admission
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in
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university
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 should not be delayed in order to achieve fascinating success in practical life and get on a pathway of success.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • work experience
  • internships
  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
  • educational progress
  • graduation timeline
  • financial burden
  • academic momentum
  • structured academic environment
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