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The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011.

The line chart below illustrates the
number
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 of cash given to developing nations from five different
organisations
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 from 2008 to 2011.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the most amount of
money
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 was given from
organisation
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number
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 2,
while
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 the least
number
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 of
money
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 was given from
organisation
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number
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 5.
To begin
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 with,
organisation
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 2 consists of the largest portion of
money
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 in comparison to other
organisations
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 during the 4 years, which was almost 2. 8
billion
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dollars
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 in the first 2 years, and only in 2010 it reached 2. 4
billion
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dollars
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 and around 2. 6
billion
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dollars
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 was given in 2011. Which was the highest amount donated by all
organisations
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 in any year.
Moreover
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,
organisation
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 3 donated an average of 1.5
billion
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dollars
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 in total during the 4 years.
Furthermore
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,
organisations
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number
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 1, 4 and 5 contributed less amount of
money
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 in comparison to 2 and 3
organisations
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. And the least
number
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 of
money
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 was given from the 4th
organisation
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 with an average of 0.5
billion
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dollars
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, organisations, money, organisation, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international aid
  • developing countries
  • economic assistance
  • fluctuations
  • trend analysis
  • philanthropic organizations
  • non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • foreign aid
  • donor countries
  • recipient nations
  • financial contributions
  • economic conditions
  • fiscal policies
  • sustainable development
  • humanitarian aid
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
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