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some people believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Discuss both sides nad give your own opinion.

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some people believe that
culture
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 can be damaged
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 of using
tourism
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 income. Meanwhile, others consider that it would rather protect
culture
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 than leave it occupied.
This
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 writer agrees with the second statement and will explain it in the following essay. On the one hand, some tour films will adjust some features of
culture
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 in order to gain more money so they will lose their origin. Some cultural things will be destroyed by tourists when they visit.
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,
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 will lead to miscommunication between tourists and native people of the
country
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.
On The other hand
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,
tourism
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 will protect and prevent people from touching it.
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,
tourism
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 will transfer information about the
culture
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 of a specific
country
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 to global friends throughout the world.
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,
culture
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 will remain forever.
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,
tourism
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 helps in increasing the revenue generation of a
country
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.
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, the Statue of Unity was built in India in order to attract tourists from all parts of the universe, so that the government could improve its
country
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's GDP. In conclusion, I still believe that
culture
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 will be kept and spread all around the world by
tourism
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.
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, developing our work sight.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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