In past people feel difference in foreign culture. Nowadays, this situation is changed. What are the causes of these chnages? Do the advantages outweigh the disadavtages?

in the past
people
felt differences in foreign culture but things have changed since
then
. with the internet and global ,communication it's obvious that society
are
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more connected than ever before. social
media
and instant messaging apps have made it so simple to connect and message your friends. there are many advantages to having a lot less difference in culture in the world. your neighboring country has a lot of similar dishes to your country and you know that because of social
media
. if it weren't for social
media
population wouldn't have known what is happening outside of their borders. it can be said that
people
are generally happier than ever before because of the similarities they feel between the different
cultures
. disadvantages are very few but some of them can be mentioned, loss of tradition is one of the disadvantages that
people
may experience. and it is caused by similarities between
cultures
because of social
media
and the interconnectedness of
people
. some countries are celebrating Christmas
instead
of their own celebration. and it is widely accepted that
this
situation is extremely bad. in my opinion differences in foreign culture have to exist. and they make us special and varied in our own different ways. change is inevitable and
due to
the existence of the ,
,
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internet
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it is somehow expected for some
cultures
to merge and new
cultures
emerge
as a result
. I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. even though
people
are aware that differences are vital they ignore them for a few reasons which are outside the scope of
this
essay.
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